Tryst, you might not be for me
It was a day like the others. Then, come the night where me and others students went to see Tryst, a play impose by our teacher. And as i am looking forward to this experience I do not really think that I might be the best person to tell if whether it should win the best play of the year or not. First, because I do not think that the play was actually for us and second, because to give an award we need special viewer’s circumstances that were not granted to us.
First of all, in every way I could see this play, I do not think it was for us, young adults. When a play or anything creative really touched us it is because we feel a connection or something that related to something we know, we understand or that acted on us. But with two protagonists of a well-advanced age, set in the Victorian years, it is clear we would not found a lot of ourselves in it. Then, despite the fine and classy staging and the well-intended performances, the story was not enough captivating for a Tuesday night of school. This old-age womanizer’s con and this poor blocked-in-her-life woman with her sad past story, had nothing to capture my attention during two hours. And even if in a way we can try to related in any of those characters, for younger story about aging people is never something really captivating. That is why I do not think I could pronounced myself on if it should win or not because it was not the best play for people of our age.
Secondly, there are circumstances to choose a winner and we were not under them. Someone who has to watch a play, a movie or anything else for a special purpose, would not do it the same way other people will do. To give an award we need to know the criteria of evaluation first. And then, we need to compare it to other candidates, something we have not do. . Yes, I could evaluated this play individually by the too much intense performances, by the simple but in a way interesting staging. I could criticized the strange projections they tried to insert and that add nothing else to it. I could also talked about my own appreciation of the play, stating the finely written dialogues. But, it is an old play so what we are rating here is this peculiar adaptation and it had nothing to truly impressed. So in any case I would issued my judgement on that question.
To sum up, I am really not qualify to give any judgement on whether it should win an award or not because I do not think I was part of the audience they were targeting and because I did not watch the play with the circumstances someone who got to choose a winner would have done it. So, winners are never general one, they are part of a majority but we too often forget the circumstances case and in any way, it is what influenced everything else.
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It was a day like the (18) others (22). Then, come (11) the night where me and others students (18, 23) went to see Tryst, a play impose (10) by our teacher. (23) And (9) as i (25) am looking forward to this experience I do not really think that I might (18) be the best person to tell (18) if (17) whether it should win the best play of the year or not. (23) First, because I do not think that the play was actually for us (23) and second, because to give an award we need special viewer’s (16) circumstances that were not granted to us. (1, 2, 23)
First of all, in every way I could see this play, (23) I do not think it was for us, young adults. When a play or anything creative really touched (10) us (18) it is because we (10) feel a connection or something that related (10) to something we (18) know, we (18) understand (11) or that acted on us. (23) But (9) with two protagonists of a well-advanced age, set in the (17) Victorian years (18), it is (11) clear we would not found (18) a lot of ourselves in it. (23) Then, despite the fine and classy (17) staging and the well-intended performances, the story was not enough captivating (19) for a Tuesday night of school. (23) This old-age (17) womanizer’s (16) con and this poor blocked-in-her-life (23, 18) woman with her sad past (17) story, had nothing to capture my attention during (18) two hours. And (9) even if in a way we (15) can (11) try to related (11) in (18) any of those characters, for younger (18) story (14) about aging (18) people is (18) never something (17) really captivating. That is why I do not think I could pronounced (18) myself (23)on if it should win or not because it was not the best play for people of our age.(19)
Secondly, there are circumstances (18) to choose a winner and we were not under them. (23) Someone who has to watch a play, a movie or anything else for a special purpose, would not do it the same way other people will do. (23) To give an award we need (11) to know the criteria of evaluation first. And (9) then, we need (11) to compare it to other candidates, something we have (18) not do. Yes, I could evaluated (11) this play individually (18) by the too much (17) intense performances, by the simple but in a way (17) interesting staging. I could criticized (11) the strange projections they tried to insert and (17) that add (10) nothing else to it. (23) I could also talked (11) about my own appreciation of the play, stating the finely written dialogues. (23) But, (9) it is an old play so what we are rating here is this peculiar adaptation and it had nothing to (18) truly impressed. (23) So in any case I would issued (18) my judgement (22) on that question.
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To sum up, I am really not qualify (11) to give (18) any judgement (22) on whether it should (11) win (11) an award or not because I do not think I was part of the audience they were targeting and because I did not watch the play with (18) the circumstances someone (23) who got to choose a winner would have done it. So, winners are never general one, (23) they are part of a majority but we too (17) often forget the circumstances case and in any way (19), it is what influenced everything else. (23)
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Grammar: 11/25
Syntax: 9/25
Content: 20/25
Rhetoric: 20/25
Total: 60/100
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